December 7

My Narrative

Over term four all the grade fours wrote their very own narritive. We got to chose our own topic.

My seed (inspiration) was more of a thought. I was thinking that I should have a person in the book telling the story and maybe it should be a devilish girl. That’s the idea my narritive is based on.

Here’s my story:

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Posted December 7, 2015 by sophiengps in category Uncategorized

14 thoughts on “My Narrative

  1. Leon

    Hi Sophie,

    Great descriptive words and phrases but don’t use emojis, other wise you’re more texting then presenting a piece of writing.

    From Leon

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    1. sophiengps (Post author)

      Hi Leon,
      You where right about the emojis. I fixed it up so if you want to see it go ahead.
      Thanks for the feedback.
      From Sophie

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  2. Milly

    Hi Sophie,

    Fantastic narrative about Makenzie! I really liked your descriptions. Your use of …. was really great. Your illustrations were always of the right thing and in the right place.

    Keep posting,
    Milly

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  3. laurenngps

    Hi Sophie
    I loved your story the storyline is very good. I love your describing words. You had a sizzling start and page design.
    From Lauren

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  4. Charlotte

    Hi Sophie,
    I loved your story so much I want to never stop reading it.I like the characters and it was all in a dialoge
    Is there going to be a next book? Please

    Keep up the fantastic work

    From Charlotte

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  5. gracejngps

    Hi Sophie,
    Amazing story I thought it’s the best yet! I know to make this a good comment I have to give you a wish but I just can’t think of one because your story is perfect. Keep up the good work
    From Grace

    P.S. How are you so good at writing story’s?

    P.P.S. How did you draw such fabulous pictures?

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  6. Ella

    Hi Sophie,

    I loved your story so much. You were really enthusiastic unlike other people they do boring story’s except for you.

    From Ella

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  7. danielstngps

    Hi Sophie,

    Your little devil story was AWESOME, I really enjoyed the story. I like the chocolate cake bit.
    Thanks for posting the story.
    P.S make more magnificent, awesome, great, story’s.

    From: you know who…

    DAN

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  8. mikaylahngps

    Dear Sophie,
    You story is amazing, on one page when you spell Miki it you spelt it Miki and on another page you spelt Miki, Mikki, your drawings are amazing and the text really makes the story come alive.
    Keep up the amazing work.
    Love Mikaylah.

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  9. sabinengps

    Dear Sophie, I love your book, it was very discriptive, but I wish you could see your pictures up close.

    From Sabine.

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  10. Isabelle

    Hi Soph,
    I haven’t read all your story yet but it so so so so interesting!!
    I have no wishes! Your story is AMAZING, well done to you.
    Isabelle

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